rach

I agree that the lines "trapped" and "can't get out" could be combined, it might help the poem better. It also might be interesting if you tried getting rid of ...

I feel like this poem just needs to be expanded by using more detail. The initial message is known, but if you take it and try to add in more ...

I really like this. It's easy to relate to. As it's been said before, just a few little rhythmic changes might help it flow better. But i really like the ...