powerofthree

Hello I will begin my critique for you now xD YWS has a rule stating that a user must keep a ratio of 2:1 for a member's writings, meaning for ...

This was a bit confusing and unclear like frenchyrude said. I suggest clarifying some. it's a good idea too. I'd like to see a bit more about each character, it's ...

I definitely have to agree with thefireinmeisJC on this one. It's too fast-paced, should be "stretched" out. But it was still an overall good plot. Pros- 1. Good Plot! 2. ...

Great job...it's getting better and better along with your writing. Your plot has come up much yet either. And you don't want to have too many characters; it's getting pretty ...

You have gotten a lot better at writing and grammar/punctuation from your first chapter, good job! Not as many errors, but still some. Keep up the hard work. Wow...you did ...

There were some grammatical errors, but no too, too many. Overall, it was a pretty good job. It was kind of nail-biting. I liked it, it was very descriptive, almost ...