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Thanks for the review:) I always appreciate grammar help, I will definitely change all of those errors. As for it being dull, I can see where you are coming from. ...

Thanks for the review :) I intend to continue this piece in the form of a novel, so Jasper's thoughts should become more evident as I progress, I will add ...

Thanks for the review! I feel really connected with my character and i'm definitely proud of him :) i'll work on the grammar issues!

Hey DreamWork! Thanks for reviewing! I can see what you mean by the abrupt transition there, I suppose the poem kind of went right along with my thought process at ...

Hey, thanks in regards to my featured poem, although I'm not sure where you would have heard it before! Unless perhaps you are just familiar with the metaphor in general. ...

Also, "they" is referring to society as a whole. :)

Ouch, that's harsh! Five months is a long time for it to end like that, but I'm sure you deserve better. I will definitely read your short! Thank you for ...

Hey! Thank you for reviewing, and you're right about the formatting, I honestly havn't had much experience with that so I just kinda went with it! I'll pm you!

Thanks for reviewing! The use of "them as if" was purposeful and I will definitely add in that comma!

Thank you! I've never heard that quote before, but I think i definitely fits. I'm looking forward to reading some of your work as well!

Thank you! It's interesting to have two different views on that last line. You definitely interpreted in the way I hoped my audience would! I appreciate the feedback!

Thanks for the review!! It's appreciated. I can see where you're coming from with that last line, it does seem a bit out of place. I'll definitely consider revising it.

Alright, so I noticed a few grammar mistakes: David looked at it but, it didn’t feel right. The comma should be after "it" and before "but" (David looked at it, ...

The story is great, although I do have a few tips grammar wise. "But for Annabel it was nothing but the truth" There should be a comma after Annabe here, ...

Thank you for the review :) I will edit the "theres"