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Re: Schizm (real poem--apologies for the first)
Long, but worth it. Kind of like reading T.S Elliot’s the wasteland, long but definitely worth it. Sometimes your sentences are suddenly really long or short as opposed to the ...
Dec 4, 2005 -
Re: Santa Clause is God (and it's a myth that he gives coal)
Very Very interesting. Although how does this fit with the title? I love the sort of criticism you have going on in it. Nice rhythmic flow. Favorite parts [quote="PsyLynx"]12-04-05 Cursed ...
Dec 4, 2005 -
Re: In The Cold
I liked the last two sentences. Nice imagery indeed. The emotion is well brought forward. I'm tracing my mind for any crititical comments or suggestions, but nothing.....I guess it's just ...
Dec 1, 2005 -
Re: Life and Death (Modified)
Good job, especially considering your age. It's short but zingy and it captures, which is good. Indeed It would be better to make both the I am alive and I ...
Dec 1, 2005