piman314

Overall I loved the great detail you put in your story. I felt motivated to go really indepth in this review so each new line is a new correction and ...

Overall great story. I loved the rich detail emanating from every page. After saying that, I ready to start my critique. The sentence: "The feeling of dread passed over me ...

Your story is pretty good. I think that if you looked over the commas a bit more it could really be improved. That way, the sentences could connect better and ...

I just want to say, overall great story. Tons of detail overflowing from page to page and the end had me on the edge of my seat. Hear are some ...