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Thanks for the reply, Griffinkeeper. I think, that had I used obscure names to show where I see myself in the prose divide, this would have served no purpose, as ...

Thanks for being the first, Griffinkeeper * this is an attempt at a non-defective version of my 'reply' to your post:) Thanks for the reply, Griffinkeeper. I think, that had ...

Well written and engaging. Quite well-written. Keep going.

Separate paragraphs, also, might want to shorten names or make them into nicknames - so that they don't have to shout sentence-long stuff to each other in the heat of ...

Yo, for user friendly format which doesn't scare away reviewers, I'd suggest: a) breaking up text into separate chapters /as in separate posts/, b) separating paragraphs with an empty line, ...

I see I ask where the wound is - my bad - you mentioned earlier it's her arm:)

Rats, Twigs, and MorningMist, thanks for the positivity burst, Mist! You're too kind - there are things to tweak almost on every line, but I'll get there. But your review ...

Sargsauce and Lilymore, thanks for the feedback. As not really sci-fi enthusiasts, your input is probably more objective in a general literary sense. So far all three reviews have been ...

Barefoot runner - great general feedback and every point you brought up is absolutely valid - thanx. The narrator is a guy and I should probably have the good doctor ...

Hey, Ziggie, thanks for the very to the point feedback. The first household fast forward to the future scene is indeed threadbare - I have to flesh it out a ...

Hi Lavvie, thanks so much for your feedback, love your style. Feels like a young Lovecraft or Henry Kuttner has read a piece of mine in a magazine on the ...

Hi, Ziggie, thanks very much for the review. You were of assistance indeed: you validated both my hopes (of sufficiently well-crafted prose) and fears (of, as you called it, robotic ...

Hi JP, good advice on the pouch; possibly I could sneak it in into the start when they are discussing whether the bush is a danger. That would be a ...

Hi, Joshuapaul, that's the anglosax (I think) in you talking:) Your recommendations would move this from the minimalist Eastern European absurdist tradition and push it into the slightly more coherent

Hi Twit, Thank you for the feedback, yes, I understand the need to know what a thing really is, in order to have a stable opinion of it. I'll try ...