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Hey, great story! Really interesting, reminded me a little of Doris Lessing's sci fi. I really like the start, I like how throughout the story there is this weird "fireworks" ...

I think joshuapaul and lorrilakeet have some good points: To make this story better you should make the narrator less interesting (a narrator ALWAYS has to be likeable) take out ...

I sort of liked the lack of emotion, it made the character unique. He is this strange little mutant living next to a radioactive lake, I think it's fine if ...

My memories consumed me. I could remember everything; from the moment that I was born to the moment I died. I could feel everything as well, my emotions unbearably vivid ...

This has a few interesting parts, but I agree with quite a few of the previous reviewers points. I think you need to work a little on the main character's ...

I gave no consideration on my health deprived by the coming winds and rain I think this needs some commas or to be revised, it's unclear what you mean. I ...

lso the thing about researching witchcraft and my opinion, you don't need to. I know the whole "nothing is right or wrong, you can say what you want" thing is ...

It was a lonely day of ninety-two degrees. The kind of day where sadness slid down your backside; melancholy formed droplets at the top of your brow. Children cried, adults ...

I liked the start, was a good way of getting to know the characters before everything got hardcore. No cheating!” I order. He smiles and nods. “It’s the last day ...

Hey, was an ok story though probably too short. You need to work on character development a little before you start exorcising demons, I didn't really get a sense of ...

Good story so far, I reckon continue it, after all it can't hurt. I liked the hints about Knox abusing goblins, you left it to the readers imagination which was ...

Hey, this story is pretty good. I really liked the voice of the narrator, edgy agressive, it was good. I really like how the narrator gets to work, its a ...

Good story, I liked the first sentence, it set the scene and made me interested. It is a little confusing at the end, does the devil pretend to be the ...