orcashadow

It seems more like you're telling the story instead of showing the story. You can call me a hypocrit for this (since I tend not to do this with my ...

I really like the perspective of the story. Too often I see stories that are written from a man's perspective about the beauty of a woman. It's refreshing to see ...

... Just a question, but is this just the beginning of your story? Or the whole thing... ? Great peice, though I found the ending to be a little lacking. ...