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I think that the teachers/school like it because of the symbolic-ness in it. It's supposed to be all about fear of the unknown, and how violent a man can be. ...

Hahaha I loved that! :D I loved the Charlie part and Edward's reason for saving Bella, it was soo funny! Great job!

:cry: That was so sad. It was really good though!

Good job, I like the name it flows really well.

:D Thanks for the crit, You just confirmed my doubts. I'd thought that those parts could use a little changing, but I wasn't sure how, thank you! The thing about ...

Thanks for the crit, So, do you want me to add on to the conversation, then have them lead onto the boy? Should I have them talking about things before ...

Thanks :D The Empire is an entire country, possibly world, I'm not sure yet. It's very large though. :D Umm, there are different types of areas; suburban, rural, and big ...

Kaliber: Good, I was worried that it didn't seem like they were friends. Saint Razorblade: Oh, thank you for that tip, I'll have to fix those. mikedb1492: Thanks, I'll have ...

:D thank you, I did think that it seemed a little fast paced, but I wasn't sure what to do. I'll have to fix that. How do you think that ...

Oh! thank you very much!! The thing about the name was that I thought it'd be good to have a guard character later on, but I'm not sure if I ...

thank you sooo much (: I defintely have a lot to improve

Thank you sooooo extremely much for the help! (: I realize that I've probably been the same way with my other works too, I'll have to try and stop myself ...

Thank you sooo much for the help! :D I'll have to change those things. Try to show that Kirsten may have been still a little uneasy about the situation and ...

Thank you for the critique :D I'm thinking of buying Strunk and White's Elements of Style because I've heard that it helps with those kinds of things. I'm horrible with ...

Thank you soooo much for critiquing this! :D For the contest, the only rules were that it had to stay with the theme "I can make a difference by..." it ...