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Re: Presents for YWS (Summer Music Mixes)
Holy schnikes, this must have taken you a long time. Great mixes, thank you so much for sharing!! By the way, I love the covers for these. Seriously, great idea. ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: DELETED
Hey, this was really interesting. I'm excited to see where you decide to go with this. Some nitpicks: Nobody expects an early death. (we all expect to die, none of ...
Jun 2, 2011 -
Re: Let it Fall
Hello! This was really interesting, I'm curious to find out what happens next. There were a few things that you might want to fix... First, was the gender of the ...
Mar 4, 2011 -
Re: Princess Angel
Hello! This was pretty bad, but I have a few ways for you to make it even worse ;) Once upon a time, there was a beautiful princess. She had ...
Mar 3, 2011 -
Re: Book Trailer
Hello! I really like the song that you put with the video, it fits in well, I also like how at certain points the beat goes along with the text. ...
Mar 3, 2011 -
Re: For Lyndsey <3
Aw, this was really sweet. I really liked reading it. It was so comparable to real life, even in its fable nature. I agree that the piece would have worked ...
Mar 3, 2011 -
Re: DELETED
Hello there! I really enjoyed reading this, it was very descriptive and easy to picture. There were a few awkward bits though: As he tugged them on, he heard the ...
Mar 3, 2011 -
Re: Untitled
Hello! I have to agree with storyweaver; this story has a lot of potential, but you kept each paragraph only about a sentence long. Try setting the scene beforehand, was ...
Mar 3, 2011 -
Re: Face^_^k!
Hello there! This was interesting, it made me a bit paranoid though. :) I agree with Titan4ever: face(less) book is a good title. These first few sentences confused me a ...
Mar 2, 2011 -
Re: Barbara
Aw, don't be so hard on yourself. If you need anyone to edit it when it's back up and beautiful, then feel free to give me a PM. No story ...
Mar 2, 2011 -
Re: (Unfinished)
Hello there! This was intriguing... Tayler already summed up what I was going to say though. I did have an issue with the flow of this paragraph: No, I still ...
Mar 2, 2011 -
Re: Last Thursday
Hello there! This was absolutely fantastic, you need to wipe away those cobwebs for good. This flowed beautifully, I loved the mystery of the ending and the imagery that you ...
Mar 2, 2011 -
Re: Half Truths
Hello! Welcome to YWS! Be sure to check out this thread if you haven't yet: I really enjoyed reading this, and I am very interested in seeing where this will ...
Mar 2, 2011 -
Re: The Black Cat
Hello! Welcome to YWS! Be sure to check out this thread. I enjoyed reading this, it kept my attention, but there were a few things that I'd like to mention. ...
Mar 2, 2011 -
Re: The Never-ending Quest for Love
Hello! When I read this I really felt as though I could connect to it. It sums up a lot of desires and hopes for love that many girls wish ...
Mar 2, 2011
