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Hey, Icy! All of this really helped, thank you!!

Also, I get the fact it's hard to feel close with a passive-ish character. I won't say much, but I plan to make the narrator slowly open and be more ...

Hey again, Val! I find these reviews very helpful, so thank you! The narrator calls his birth-mother "the mother" because he never really knew her. She died the minutes he ...

Thank you so much for the helpful review, Icy! I can get now where are the too-confusing-parts that I should edit.

Thank you so much for the review, Val! I'm really glad you liked the writing style, and I took all of your helpful notes. :)

Wrote "cheeck" instead of "cheek", oops!

or come up* ;)

Thank you for the review! Got all of your notes. About the fact that the narrator said he didn't know when the sun set and then it changed - I ...