olympian1999

Are you sure you've updated it? I'd be glad to help more, but it doesn't look different. It may be a glitch on my end, I don't know.

Thanks so much! I did feel that those sentences were a little clunky and awkward, so thanks for helping me fix those. I'm glad that you enjoyed!

Thank you so much! I really appreciate the help. I know a few mistakes are from when I switched from third person to first half way through haha. I'm glad ...

Hey guys! Thanks for reading. I'm a new user who just started writing with newfound courage. Please let me know what you think and how I can improve. Thanks!