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I think the first and last sentences are rather stereotypical....try and come back with something a little different.... Think of it like this...you're a sales person trying to sell your ...

Love the happens to us all at some point and it's always horrible...it's great to have a theme loads of people can relate to... Noticed a couple of problems though ...

Hmmmm are you carrying on with this? Was a bit disappointed with the lack of information given about why Rachel was in trouble...I also was unsure about her friendship with ...

Hey EmmaSweetie... I think the child in me went to click on the title! Love it! Hehe! I have slight problem with the wording in the first line... Love is ...

Hey There were strengths and weaknesses to this poem....one of the strengths was the way you set it out...very eye catching!! Well done...i love a bit of variation However, although ...

Hey, Sorry I never saw your message last night! Shame on me! I feel I have let you down as an instructor! Just from skim reading this, I noticed your ...

Hey springrain! I'm glad you've decided to join us again! We should be honoured! Anyway, I love the perspective you're writing from here! Just a couple of suggestions to make... ...

Yet again, nice work Adrian! I love the effect you created by starting a new sentence without starting a new line...I don't know how you did this but it somehow ...

My God young man! Sorry for blaspheming but seriously you have to give me something I cannot rave about because this is getting boring...hahaha I loved your arrangement here and ...

Hello again! You seem to like my reviews so I'll keep coming back to you if you don't mind! Lol! I loved this piece and to be quite honest, I'd ...

I think angel of death has picked up on all the errors but don't quote me on this....I simply didn't find any others myself.... I love your character and do ...

I just had to comment on this and say how thoroughly fantastic it is...truly very spectacular.... I love how short and sweet it is, and it actually shocks me how ...

Hey I like the title of this, it's what made me click on it! It reminded me of the Virginia Andrews series, Flowers in the Attic, Petals in the Wind, ...

Nice little short and sweet piece, but I do have a couple of suggestions for you, if I may be so bold! Friends, this is a word which has a ...

How depressing! Lol, but anyway...it's pretty well written...just got a couple of here goes! I am going to talk about the worst conflict that the world has ever seen. Now, ...