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Yeah, I liked it a lot, too. It was pretty well put together, for a free write. In the third to last sentence, you used the word "utter," twice. Be ...

I didn't really get into this. If more was available to me, I might, but it's not. But it's good that you didn't post too much at one time, as ...

Okay, I know this is sort of a disrepectful thing, but, I didn't read the whole thing, just the first paragraph. Indeed, you are correct sir. In my oppinion, only ...

This was really funny, and I enjoyed it a lot. I liked the format you chose. The four rhyming lines, then a short, blunt, unrhyming, funny line. I think that ...

Okay, this was semi-good. Lemme tell you why it was only semi -good. The beggining got my attention. The, after Jadyn woke up, it got boring. The story continued like ...

... yeah ... I think you can do away with the commas. They're just distractions and break up the piece really badly. This was good for what it was, but ...

ill think about that, jack. if you dont mind could you give me some pointers as to where i could inlude emotions? Man, it's your poetry, it has to include ...

I enjoyed this. I liked the way your main character narrated, as if she were really talking. I didn't understand the very first part, though. The part with the phone. ...

Holy mother of Allah, God, Jesus, Shiva, Vishnu, Bramah, Moses, and of course, Buddha combined, this was awesome. I loved the rhythm, how it drived and flowed. It was marvelous. ...

I understood the literal meanings, but, I couldn't tell what you were trying to get through here. I looked at this, because I hate it when people make fun of ...

This was great. But I think that the last half, except for the last line, where the lines start to get shorter, just dosen't flow. Well, it flows, but it ...

This is undoutedly the best work you've written and posted here, in my oppinion. The only thing that I think needs work is the last stanza. With the blood and ...

If this is true, then it completely belongs in randomness. However, if this is supposed to be a real story, then it was still the most random thing I have ...

Way too limerick-ish to me. Like, way too limerick-ish. I think this could have been so much better than it is. When I saw the title, I thought that It ...

I didn't understand this the first time I read it, but the second and third, I got it. This was pretty creative. I always like it when poets mess with ...