oceanwriter99

Very interesting, and very dark and sinister sounding. I like the idea that I think your going for its just I think you should keep writing and explain the situation ...

Hi! First off I love this! I think it's a great start to something. It's really a cliff hanger! It's something I would read and wonder 'What did this pour ...

First off this is a very interesting story, I like the idea and concept. Just a few things that don't make senses to me. First is your MC male or ...

Well hello, I really like the idea and concept that you have going on it's just toward the middle and end I got a little confused. "As the Spawn gotten ...

Whoa! Really great, I didn't see to many mistakes or problems. I really like the idea! The end of it was INTENSE! I can also relate to the story and ...

First off I like the concept idea that you have going on, but it all starts off on a pretty strange note. So to my understanding, your MC was in ...

Hey! First off I really like this, it sounds very interesting! Its just, I think you could of put a little bit more into the start of the story to ...

This is a very interesting piece, I like it but wish you would of put some more explanations and descriptions in it. It is a bit over dramatic if you ...

First off really good! Just a few things, as before. First in the sentence " "She said the guy cit her Brachial artery, the one in your arm. She's losing ...

First off I think this is a really good concept! I love the idea of a girl werewolf! Thats not something you see often and that's something that would keep ...

I think it's a very interesting piece, its just you move through it very quickly. I think its a truly beautiful piece of writing, but toward the end the last ...

First off I think its a good idea. But you need to go back through and revise, revise, revise. One part that I don't seem to understand is the world ...

I love where you are taking this story! Just a few minor things, once again. For one thing, I don't understand why the MC didn't tell Master that she had ...

First off I love the concept and idea of the story,really cool! Just a few things. "Simple people, people no better than she knew Master to be, those were the ...

First off, I think its a good concept but the story it's self is very confusing. You talk about you last adventure and how you were transported some where else, ...