noninjaes

I think I might rewrite a few of the later chapters.

What I mean is with those lines is a moment of pain so great that you don't know what's real or not.

I'll make the changes, I'm horrible when it comes to tense.

Definite improvement.

Something funny and light. Not the best piece of work as it isn't as well structured as a normal story. It is also a bit short, but I guess that's ...

By the way, which uni are you hoping to be accepted into?

Thanks for the feedback so far. I don't write poetry that often.

Short and funny. It sums up Chamber Of Secrets in less than 10 mins. But It would of been better with more detail.

A wonderful poem that brings forth the fact that love is an emotion that words can't convey. Short and simple but with a deeper meaning.

Reality is a bitch. Great story, keep writing.

Its a work in progress. The second paragraph is a dream. It will make more sense in a later chapter.