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Overall the story felt very rushed. Try exploring Whitney's surroundings more. Also the dialogue is a bit stilted in parts, but not too bad for a first draft, keep on ...
Dec 15, 2015
Overall the story felt very rushed. Try exploring Whitney's surroundings more. Also the dialogue is a bit stilted in parts, but not too bad for a first draft, keep on ...
Dec 15, 2015