neverendingthoughts

okay then. it's a good start. you definitely need to refine your pacing and characterization - everything feels very choppy and sudden, but given circumstances, it's forgivable. do several checks ...

Yes, I know I may have repeated some things. I was in a hurry because my parents were rushing me so I am sorry. But other than that, how did ...

I like it! But if you want it to be more dynamic, then go for it! It's good either way. :)