mysterywriter

i think this is really good griffin writer. i liked the description and i like how the action happened right away, it kept my attention. can't wait to read more ...

His aura was smelled of singed sandalwood and freshly dewed grass. this is a really great line. i really love it. “This…us…your damned chivalrous ways.” Ariel repeated. i also like ...

"I cant believe you done that." I snapped at Amber this should be: "I can't believe you did that." But deep down inside I was secreatly wishing I had of ...

i still like it. you can tell a bit by the writing that you seem a little bored with it. i think it has more potential though. how about suzana ...

mattie - i think that this is a good plot, there are some grammar mistakes but i wouldn't be one to correct them since i make a lot of them ...

j hippy - i think that this was really really good. very descriptive and poetic. i hope that you consider doing more with it because i think it has the ...

definitely makes me keep want to reading it. i would try to avoid using the 'well' thing. for instance: well, me. or well, my parents. also i can't tell when ...

"In life, lies are punished. On paper, they are rewarded. Yet, maybe on paper I am more myself then even in life. Perhaps writing brings out the truth more then ...

wow. this is so romantically morbid. i liked it and i wouldn't want to change anything about it...you did a really good job with the description of everything and i ...

i enjoyed it. i would give you grammar tips but i myself am not that great when it comes to grammar. :lol: one suggestion i will give you is: put ...