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“From where they were sitting in the tunnel, it looked like the tunnel was a few feet above the relative floor of the big room they were looking into. ” ...

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Yeah I get you... I wish I could give you a blind perspective but idk how that%u2019s possible at this point lol

Hmmm idk I still personally like where the monologue is... it kinda catches the readers off guard a bit and makes them wonder who or what is saying that... and ...

“It was at that moment that the saloon doors slammed open, and all eyes turned to see the sheriff clomp in, with the stars of his boots jangling with every ...

“I’m more prepared than I look” OHOHOHO LITTLE DOES SHE KNOW

Lol when u a lost Dragon scholar and knew who was talking in that first but with two seconds

That%u2019s exactly what I was thinking:)))

Yeah and don%u2019t really worry about the saloon as much bc I feel like most people can picture drowsy saloons but maybe just have James described a bit more from ...

I’m so psyched that you’re starting! This is already worlds better than your first draft! The mood is so much more prominent and the cheese was melted away. This is ...