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Re: The Chains of Duty Chapter 2: The Spell
Yeah...the ending man. It just seems like the wrong place to end a chapter. Write more, and end it with a cliffhanger or after something interesting happens during the meeting....like ...
May 19, 2014 -
Re: Yellow Flower
Beautiful! I just have one suggestion: I think you should write "Yells her daddy, who was once kind" rather than "Her once kind daddy yells" But the writing was amazing ...
May 14, 2014 -
Re: What Disturbance in Sleep May Lead One To Do
Thanks for the review! It meant a lot to me! About the punctuation and all- the poem was originally divided into stanzas but after I typed it up and posted ...
Apr 26, 2014 -
Re: What Disturbance in Sleep May Lead One To Do
Thank you so much, for taking the time to review my work! And about the lack of punctuation...the poem was originally divided into stanzas but something happened when I posted ...
Apr 26, 2014 -
Re: The Chains of Duty Chapter 1: Enemies We Were, What Are We Now?
yeah cool name, and no, i wasn't 12
Apr 21, 2014