mizz-iceberg

Very, fast paced. Something I was hooked till the end. I was a bit confused when the transition of your narrative style came. At first I thought this was a ...

The story s really intereseting and i can't wait to see how everything turns out. Post more!! You might want to divide your writing into paraghraphs. Maybe you can show ...

I think the chapter could be longer....maybe you can put more details about Annie's personality and tell the reader more about her. I like the idea of ending a chapter ...