miyaviloves

Loved that. Its simple and effective, it works so well and has a lovely flow. Nothing more to be said. Meevs x

this si good for someone who dosent really do poetry, much better than my attempts! all the crit work has been done for you, I just wanted to say how ...

I agree with Claudette, i liked this and yor writing now must have improved lots! Anyway what i might suggest is well...ntohing really lol, just keep writing! Well done! Meevs ...

I actually liked this :S but if you think it may not be suitable for some readers on here, then post a rating? Meevs x

haha this was great! But should it be in fan-fic? Actually no, i dunno...oh well, its good anyway where ever it ends up :D Meevs x

post part four :(

Well there isnt really anything else to say that no one else has already said :) good job, this is wonderful! Miyaviloves

Well, I'm not sure why but that made me want to cry? I'm really not one for poetry but i have fallen in love with this peice, its original and ...

oh and Canned Beans will be no more! I have finished with that :\ I was stuck on where its going, unless you have any suggestions on it i will ...

thanks Alainna Oh i know i name things confusinly, it goes (from my portfolio) 1 Ice Cubes Ice Cubes #2 Ice Cubes #3 2 Ice Cubes #4 Ice Cubes #5 ...

Im afriad i also have to agree with Seig, this was way too repetative, but ther than that i quite liked it. A bit of editing and it could be ...

Oh dear...

I have been reading this all along, but havent commented yet, not sure why :S Anyway, i LOVE it, but i also thought it was a flashaback at first. Anyway ...

Lancrist pointed most of the errors out here. Like i said to you, reminded me of 300! I loved it, i loved reading it, it was exciting and i will ...

^^ edited this bit, changed her name because i didnt think Mel worked. Also posted number 5 but its rated so it wont be on the main page. Jules, thanks ...