mistielovesyou

This is a good story but it might need a little more. Probably more description or background. Plus the story kind of ends on an ambiguous note. Maybe you should ...

This was a really cute story. Very quirky and...nice. It might be a bit unrealistic, as was said by the commentor above, but I liked it. My only thing would ...

This is very good. I loved how you described human emotion, and how realistic this is. It' s great to realize that not all people have the courage to blurt ...

This is a really sweet story, and I loved it. The way you described the characters was very nice, and the detail was vivid in my head. My only thing ...

This was good. However, the first three sentences of this story were a little..passive I'll say. And it' s "I've never felt so scared" not "I never felt so scared" ...

This was okay, but kind of cheesy. The ending probably wouldn't have the impact on the reader that you wanted. That's because you started out with a serious tone in ...

Is this a beginning? Because if it is this is really good. It's fine by itself, of course, but it'd be a nice beginning. The only thing I have to ...

This was really good. I liked the insanity from the boy "Ted" and the story as a whole. Although the third line in the story "His eyes were completely serious" ...

This is okay, but the story is a little implausible. If people actually knew this guy was doing this (like Jenny did), wouldn't he be arrested? No one, especially the ...

This is awesome. I loved how you made the story flow easily so you could see it vividly in your head. The emotions in the story were conveyed subtly, and ...

I agree that the writing was a little flat for me, but it was okay. This peace needs a lot more dramatice voice to become better. Nothing much happened, so ...

Good story! This was good writing, and it was an interesting story. I especially loved the beginning, and how it seemed like a fairytale. However, the ending was little abrupt ...

I love this!! It was simple, well-written, and conveyed its point very well. I enjoyed how the protagonist was evil but never really had it come back to bite him, ...

Well, that was interesting. The thing is, I didn't get that he killed himself until i reread the end a few times. Maybe you should hint more at what he ...

Was this just a short story? What I mean is, is this the end of it? If this is the end it was just..okay. You wrote this really well, but ...