mikedb1492

Very well done. There's nothing for me to say since everyone else has done it, but it wasn't much anyway. I especially like the way you described her pain and ...

Hey, I guess I'll be your critique guy. Water lined everything, covering the walls, ceiling, floor, a layer of water like a perfect mirror. In the centre of the cavern, ...

Then the trees broke on ethre side of the road... I think you meant to say either, but that word doesn't work in that situation. Just say they broke on ...

One word: Brilliant. This was amazingly well written. It held deep thought, made sense, and even makes the reader question what they believe at moments. I think it was these ...

Hey, it's me again. I liked this chapter more than the first but I've still got a few things to say. Tor likely didn’t die because the acid in the ...

First things first, I like the story, and I think you've got a good thing going here. With that said, I have to tell you that you've got some work ...

Alright, let's get started. First off, the prologue was too short in my opinion. You only showed us a small part the story that that one dude was reading to ...

This was an decent prologue in my opinion. It had action and was well described so it kept me entertained and curious as to what would happen. I like the ...

Hey, I'm Mike and I'm here to review you. There were dozens of them, softly pulsing in many different colors. Change the phrase 'in many different colors' to something like ...

1) What do you think? Any good? It was pretty cool. It was descriptive and well written. 2) a. If this was the beginning of a novel, would you find ...

All I can say about this is 'wow'. This was really well written and left you with a weird, creepy feeling. I really liked it even though it was a ...

Hm, interesting story. I liked it. I noticed that the white caps on the waves reminded me of wild horses galloping, their manes flying in the breeze, I like this ...

..... So they're both guys? And one asked for the others number? Weird. "OMG! Can I have ur #?" Don't use acronyms and symbols it makes your work look unprofessional..... ...

She only turned from the window and sat at the table where she had helped craft the spell that would massacre the city. The other guy talked about this being ...

This was pretty cool. I really liked it. The opening sentence was made me wonder "Why was there a wall trapping them?" and that alone made me really curious. One ...