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melkor

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Until death do us part

    Hahahahaaaaa!!!!At last, bloodshed and pretty description! -Pardon me, but the last five reviews or so i've done just now were about as painful as stabbing your own eyes with a ...

    Jan 15, 2009
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Ashurbanipal

    Righto...Let's keep this short... I'll make five points.. JUST FIVE!! (a nd please note, I'm not one for grammar suggestions, being terrible at it myself:P) While you, can read, and ...

    Jan 15, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Blue, Purple and Red

    Hmmmmm....... -thinks for a long time about this 'un- Well... Let me be honest.. As poetry, I don't like it. Thats not very elaborate is it? But at least I ...

    Jan 15, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Accidents Happen

    As this is real short, I'll not be overly elaborate. Hmm....this was slightly sad, if there had been more of it, then i would have felt incredibly bad for this ...

    Dec 18, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: The Zipper of Your Pants part 3

    1. Readability - How easy your story is to read. A good story will obviously be much easier to read than a bad one. Flow of words 2/3 Rather nicely ...

    Dec 17, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Invisible Man, Prologue

    Okay..I'll review this as I go along reading... From the first part, down to 'all was taken in silence.' Mistakes so far -shudders should be shutters- -Will- should be we'll- ...

    Dec 15, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: That's all

    1. Readability - How easy your story is to read. A good story will obviously be much easier to read than a bad one. Flow of words 2/3 Thoughts conveyed ...

    Jun 5, 2008
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: 'Veggies'

    1. Readability - How easy your story is to read. A good story will obviously be much easier to read than a bad one. Flow of words 2/3 Thoughts conveyed ...

    Jun 5, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Farm Invasion

    Oh my boys kissing! I condemn thee to the bowels of hell! Just kidding, I'm a pretty open guy, it ain't my thing, it was weird reading it, but the ...

    May 20, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Alone

    Yes this is quite pretty poem. It makes me sad though, I know too many people like that, we all fear being old and alone, don't we? Just don't post ...

    May 15, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Mirror Mirror

    Ahh, the tyranny of anorexia, nice idea. You had a perfect rythmn I have to say, nice and fat, I should say. :D the whole thing fits so perfectly. I ...

    May 15, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Jack Frost (Winter)

    I loved it. 'The wolves slow their song, Three – four to four – four to Eight – eight, and the frost stops whispering. ' Best line ever. I think ...

    May 15, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: "The paper burns..."

    Ahh yes I got the typo, thats the only one I think. Overall I enjoyed the fact that you made a poem from a quote, a nice idea. It's clear ...

    May 15, 2008
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Fireworks for the War (Edited)

    Well I have finally ddi as I said I would! To be honest, it's nothing short of fantastic! I'm very interesting in humanities war and 'going over the top' is ...

    Apr 8, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Survival of the Extinct Chapter 1

    Well I'm going to try to be as critical as possible because I guess that's the point. :D before I do big bad wolf, I'd like to point out that ...

    Mar 6, 2008


The most difficult thing in the world is to know how to do a thing and to watch somebody else doing it wrong, without comment.
— T. H. White