marklavish

This review looks at grammatical and structural elements of your story. However, I'd just like to offer the suggestion of maybe introducing the "siren" part of the story earlier, such ...

My review is more of a grammar/spelling check than a review of the story itself. The biggest element that was stumbling me was the large blocks of text. It would ...

This seems like it would be better suited to be a play or something of that matter. I think it would read a lot better if it were structured that ...