marguardtm

I like it/the overall sentiment. Just wanted to say I think the "There my soul" line could benefit from an extra syllable for rhythm's sake. Also I think it ought ...

I disagree; life is more like hockey ;) Just kidding, this was pretty awesome. I'll just let you know of a couple issues with grammar, not form or content: in ...

This isn't going to be a review. (Is that frowned upon here, writing replies but not reviews?) I just wanted to say this is one of my favorite contest entries, ...

I really like the way you use language--it's careful, but not pretentious. There's a fine line and you're on the right side of it. I do agree with the review ...