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"That one," the girl murmurs. That one? What is it she's looking at? I clear my throat. Startled, she turns on her heel, a light-stylus raised as if in defense. ...

I enjoyed reading this! You have lots of detail, which is greatly appreciated. Just some little nitpicks, the first time you mention the hole in the membrane wall, you spell ...

If you meant to or not, you gave this story a very detached air to it through all the choppiness, which I really liked. It made it seem like it ...