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Okay, I understand the formatting of your poem. I would have to agree with Abigail about the "forced rhyming". There are places you should insert words as well as places ...

The formatting is fine now, I was easily able to read your poem. It seems like you began to flow and rhyme, then the style changes. I like your style. ...

Amazing. The poem is very tense and exciting. I liked the way you word your sentences. They are not necessarily complete. However, the wording is proper for the style of ...