lysolstinks

again, you surprised me with the dialogue. mental images i am not sure i want,. but yet i cant stop reading. very well done. lysolstinks

i have been following your story. it is intriguing, it goes places where i least expected. it also makes one think. is there something else out there we cant see. ...

for your first time, you did very well. there need to be more love stories, make the world a better place. will be lookiing for the next chapter.

very well done. short but sweet. says it all.

as was stated above, i see alot of spelling problems. just change the format , try using word on your computer. word will help you with the layout and the ...

This chapter rocks, it had me on the edge of my seat. well written, still grammar errors, but i am now headed to ch 4. i am actually liking this. ...

again with the same comments i have left re. ch one, i noticed you had more chapters posted, so i decided to see where the story takes me. this one ...

This is well written as far as the story line, there are a few grammar errors, but i see they have already been brought to your attention. although i am ...