luvinpadfoot

I really enjoyed this, although the end was a bit confusing. I'm sure it will all clear up in the next chapter. The first thing I wanted to address was ...

Such a heart-breaking first chapter! I could feel Chad's pain at Alexis's death. One sentence that confused me was this one: "The other abided in the Otherworld. Where no mortal ...

So good! A little short, but very good! I was thinking that maybe you should change the millions of people to a smaller number because you referred to the place ...

This was really good and sweet! I can understand how it made you tear up. The first suggestion I have is about the spacing. You really don't need to indent ...