lunasouseiseki

OKAY :) I have added more human aspects to the story. I have a habit of forgetting that ppl dont read a story the same way I do because in ...

thanks! you are so right about the characters I am going to fix it up and do a re-write :)

you are VERY talented my friend! I cannot wait to see how this whole story pans out.

oh and try "we will cause the end of the world" - flows better. but once again, just a suggestion

I have to hand it to you, I liked it. I wasn't quite sure what all was going on, but it kept me interested whilst I was reading. I found ...