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Re: The Chess Set (part 2 out of 3) resubmitted and reformatted
Good continuation that leaves more questions to be answered. Love it. But remember that when you start a new paragraph you have to add speech marks even if the character ...
Jan 12, 2008 -
Re: My new story
It moves a bit too quickly for my liking. Why is it that he suddenly loves her? Also, there are many grammar mistakes. Try to integrate good grammar into your ...
Jan 11, 2008
