lost-my-mind

Hay this is really good. I agree with Snoik's way of setting it out. It is a lot easier to read that way. Also I like the way you make ...

I definitely prefer the 'After' one as it is the basis of the 'Before' but it is better. I really like your ideas in this poem and it causes one ...

These were really well written and had powerful emotions behind them that came through beautifully. Just a point, if you broke them up with spaces it would make it easier ...

This is a really great story, you are a talented writer. Just be careful in several parts I was lost when it came to who was speaking and had to ...

I liked the general feel of this poem but The reins of reason may have slipped Momentarily from my grip. I wasn't worried, it was not the first time It ...

this is very touching. It is cute and sad. I think this is very unique and I think she should submit it definitely. I’d sit at his kitchen table, sticky ...

I did like this but the flow to me seemed a bit choppy, like for a bit it it had a good flow then it changed to not having one ...

I like this but you need to work on structure. It is all jumbled together leaving it with little to no flow and via is right it is more story ...

This is a rather depressing poem but thankfully I like it! I really enjoyed the truth to it and it really made me think well done. Pets are shown lavished ...

I don't like the first two stanza's they are over repetitive, if you changed it so every second line int the first two stanza's said 'his' then it would make ...

LOVE LOVE LOVE it! this was really well done and practically perfect and oh so touching. My dear penguie you did show all those people that poems definitely do not ...

it doesn't flow at all but you know this but it has potential if you took time and went over it and fixed it up a little then you could ...

I really did like this it is good to hear someones thoughts as they go about their day and how ever much we hate to admit it everyone Else's lives ...

I really do like where this is going but, yes there is a but, I think you ended it too quickly. The ending is the most important piece in a ...

The first part was awesome but the second part was too much of a jump for me. It just went back way too fast and it was too much information ...