lordgluzman

I thought it was pretty good rap song. But you should make it longer. But to be quit honest I thought you did write it in a hurry. Come on ...

I didn't really get some parts. Your descriptions and the point of the story was great. But I didnt really get the begging and th ending. Try to make it ...

I did a lot what you said and thankyou.

You should make it longer. Edit it. You are 15 years old you shouldn't be that lazy. I mean, I am 13 and I am writeing more then 10 page ...

your story-poem was cool. I really liked the point and the rhyme but what was the The head man's hill? You need to be more specific in that case.

That was interesting, I really liked it it was educational too. Now I finally know what is Buddhism. What grade did you get on this at your school? I didn't ...

ye I kinda agree with her. I play the bass guitar and drums. But this website is for writeing.

I liked it. But you need to make your poetry to be longer. Then I will really like it and give you a ster. But dont be sad. I still ...

This got to be awsome! I cant wait to read. But I hope you wonet give up on this story like you did on the grim reaper. Good Luck

what are the punctuation problems?

I dont know how to change it to fan-fiction

What should I put?

I really liked the poem. If you want to move it to lyrics, but then make it longer. Your poem teaches moral as well. Thats what I like about poems. ...

How about food companies that make healthy food? In Finland you guys have KC super market. In America we have Kroger,Publix,Whole Foods, and a lot more

I agree with my friend Vlad. You could actually make this rap for a heavy beat. Your song is really teachible and rite, but I know that politics and companies ...