lone-flower

Azila has said pretty much everything I wanted to say. Except for these: You don’t know how lucky you are.” She said, looking enviously at my brother’s breeches and tunic. ...

Beautiful! the launderette beats the secrets from the clothes, washes clandestine confessions from the sheets. she presses kimonos, who tell tales of scandals, rags that weep of poverty. This was ...

Maybe you should have made the dialogue and the narration sound a bit more like the same person. Her thoughts were too melancholy when compared to the dialogue, and the ...

Whew, space your paragraphs out please! After you do that I will come back and review it, but the big chunk of text is overwhelming. :shock: :D *raises right hand ...

I know you're probably tired of other people's comments by now. Especially since we say almost the same thing over and over again. I'm afraid I'm going to have to ...

Once again, amazing! I can't wait for the third chapter. hehe. And to answer your questions: 1. I like your characters. Except for, like Alainna said, Samantha. I just don't ...

Hello!!! I almost didn't read this because it was so long, but I started reading it anyway and got really into it. I really like your writing style and your ...