lilymoore

'Ello Jane! First off, this actually very gripping at the beginning but I noticed one little flaw, and that was in the use of a sniper rifle. Generally, sniper rifles ...

Hi there, Layla. (lovely name by the way. I baby-sit a little girl named Layla. She’s such a doll.) :D Okay, first off, the list of inspiration probably wasn’t completely ...

Hey there Jack! It’s reviewing time. :D First off, some nitpicks… she asked ehr mother. Ooops, typo. ;) Keep this amd call your Yet another little typo. :P She ignored ...

Hey there Kara I just figured I would creep on ya! *teehee* So, a few nitpicks. I’m a liar, a bitch and nobody all at once. This chunk of dialogue…it ...

First off, I can totally relate to this situation. My best friends have always been guys though not the football player type, but I know what it's like to have ...

Okay, I’m going to dive in head first on this one and point out a few very small things that I wanted to bring up. I don’t suppose what happened ...

Hi there observer! Lily here! First of all, I’ve got just one tiny little nitpick. I was ready! You changed to past tense here which means that ‘was’ should just ...

So, Vamp, I really liked this piece, for all it was in its shortness. And you got first place in the contest! :D Just PM me with the pieces you ...

Hi hi hi Forest! I’m sorry I didn’t get the contest stuff judged until…well…tonight but I did get it finished finally and that counts, right. ^^ Anyways, I thought I ...

Hey there rustic_rebel. I’m sorry that this took soooo long but I also figured I’d let you know that you received third place in the contest. Claim your prize by ...

Yay, I get first reviews! Hi Era, long time, no see! *curtsies* Okay, pleasantries have ended, now on to the review! First of all, the opening line… The mime smiled ...

Hi there! Here to *nomnomnom* your work! First off, some… Nitpicks Anybody that gets written down for misbehaviour will be spending the rest of tonight with me ‘Misbehaving’ seems like ...

But this was really great Rina!!! I read the original beginning some time ago but from what I remember, Sarah never shot the couch…unless I’m forgetting. *shrugs* The only thing ...

Tiff! I’ll say right now that I’ll be as careful with this as I can be. I’m sure it has a lot of a story behind it. I’ll point out ...

You have a story here, Night, filled with emotion but as Lena pointed out wonderfully, there is a lot of work that needs to be done as far as the ...