lilyjacobs

Pretty short chapter for what you've written before, but very good. I thought it was a little stragne that you named his father. Or that you called him by his ...

Sorry I couldn't read this till now. I'm liking this chick, 'Red'. She's cool. Very outspoken. She knows who she is and what she likes and doesn't like and that's ...

So i can already tell from the previous comments that you've edited you story a lot. I have to say from what I read of the previous quotes that the ...

Well this is off to a pretty good start. For one, its very intruiging and I like where you're going with this. I also like your writing. i didn't get ...

Wow. That made my heart beat faster. You write really good sex scenes. Its very sad at the same time. I'm glad you didn't describe the corpse beyond, "his still ...

Okay, so... I love it. It describes a lot of the characters floating around in my head too. I was a little surprised that she was only in ninth grade, ...

I'm amazed. I could never get a handle on how to write short stories, though I love to read them. This is great. I love it. And the progression you ...