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Hi! Firstly, I really liked this. Great premise. Winter Raven is an awesome name. I'd like to know more about the mysterious stranger, and the Underworld, and the elders, and ...

Hi! First off, this is a great representation of what you're writing. You describe it very clearly. The only problems are a few spelling errors and grammar issues. Of course, ...

Hi! First off, let me say that this is a good idea. You're smart to not automatically give your protagonist a perfect ending. Plus, the boyfriend is not the stereotypical ...

Hey! I think I'll be reviewing all your stuff, not too long even though I won't get any points but just because you're a friend and I don't want to ...

Hi! Okay, first off, I love this. You sent me a message asking for suggestions (love your avatar by the way) and I finished reading this like fifteen seconds ago ...

Hi! Interesting story. I passed through a short period of hypochondriactivity when I was little, so I can sympathize with the hypochondriac. Good things: This is really morbidly funny. Hilarious, ...

Hi! Lelu here, almost as new a member as you are now. I loved this story. I hope there's more to it, because the whole premise is cute, amusing, and ...

Hello! Lelu again. Obviously. I find myself finding a good deal of information per dorf when I read this. Dorf is just a funny word. Good points: I love this. ...

Hello! This is Lelu. Obviously. I've read the other two chapters, and this is interesting me very much. I'll definitely be reading the next chapters. I love this. Good points: ...

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I think you're right about wanting to make this a graphic novel. It would definitely make things better. I like the place you put them in. It's beautiful and mysterious ...

Why is he content? Why don't you mention whether it's a guy or a girl? Since your username is Thundahguy, I assume your random character is a guy, but who ...

I'm glad this is not a whole story by itself but a first part of a bigger one. It's an interesting beginning to a larger thing. This was somewhat amusing ...

Loved it! One question: First you say that the piano was missing a leg, and then you say it only has one. Does it have a blocky leglike thing in ...