Young Writers Society

Hi! First off, this is a great representation of what you're writing. You describe it very clearly. The only problems are a few spelling errors and grammar issues. Of course, the story is the whole point, and it's well done, but copyediting can make or break a thing like this. It can make it look like it's overdone, when really it's well written. Problems: You say the maids are smoothing and plumping. What exactly is there to plump? A pillow? Next, you talk about her unrelenting tuition. I'm not sure tuition is the right word, and "ones" needs an apostrophe. After that, there should be a dash instead of a period; otherwise, it's a sentence fragment. She is a mere 19-year old woman, not "women." You misspelled "draped," but I'm assuming it was just a typo. "Satin-soft" needs a hyphen. Also, it's "barely," not "barley." Her bra needs a hyphen between "tight" and "fitting."
In conclusion, I know I mostly talked about problems, but that's just because problems need more talking to fix, not because your work had more bad things than good.

Very nice idea for a story, executed well. I liked the use adjectives and the sense of being trapped in a role that you created. The vocabulary is ranged and the atmosphere you fabricated is pretty good. A little more work on the structure would be good and a slightly wider range of punctuation, but overall, a pretty good, well-written short story. Well done!

Beautiful! Very well-written.

I'd like to point out a few mistakes:

Its all worthless if there is no substance behind the modelled façade

a knowledge of how to secure a countries prosperous future, and a quiet confidence when involved in parliament meetings and debates.

surrounded by coved palace walls, drapsed in satin soft curtains

makeup on he lips and around her eyes

Drawing out out the light and pushing back the dark.

coupled with a pitying look that made her want to stamp her feet and erupt into a childish tantrum - willing to be put back into her nursery dress and fetch her favourite toys to spend the rest of the afternoon with.