ladcat13

I apologize for my arrogant words, I was actually pissed at the time that I wrote it because my school's internet network was giving me crap about this website again ...

THIS is the kind of thing that gives this website a bad name and gets it website banned from school wifi networks. While the story is beautifully written it has ...

Apparently the website is judgmental of time/hours spent, not by activity in the community. How biased of it.

Shoot, wait. I just realized I'm a "New Member" too. How embarrassing.

I put the italicized paragraphs in the beginning there to either add dramatic irony or to add background information. They come at the beginning of each chapter, but it's been ...

Fixed 'em. I'm glad you pointed those out, I wouldn't have seen them otherwise. Thanks!

I fixed 'em. Since you pointed them out, they started bothering me, too! I'm always happy to have a third party look at my work, they tend to catch things ...

Very powerful. I don't think I can say anything that hasn't already been said. Allon-sy!

Here we go! A person who speaks English! I say stuff like that all the time and people just stand around in their daft little faces with their mouths flapping ...

I believe that the latter is true, not so the former. I quite liked your poem, it was very... Creative. And original, don't forget that one.

Wow! This sounds like a great storyline. I like your writing style, which makes it easier to like the story. I can't wait for the next chapter. Let me know ...

Very nice peice! I love the description that is so vivid and meaningful. Great job, and keep writing!

Why would she race him if he's a blink? Duh. He would teleport. And that would be really funny if he did sneeze during a blink ;D

Yup

Hey go ahead and use it if you like, as long as you don't formally publish. I do plan to make a book using this. I did work on it ...