kokobeans

Her cheeks are what?? I really liked your descriptions at the beginning and your references to art, but I have to agree with Angel. The imagery was great, but I ...

Ello! Hmm... Sorry, but the first thing that came to mind when I read this was Green day. It's probably an odd coincidence, but you should look up the song ...

Hola I really like this, it's a brilliant description, especially of something as simple as crossing the road. The whole 'dog *** and marajuana' thing caught me off guard. I ...

From glancing at this I'd say there's little poetry in it, with or without the translation. I'll admit I really enjoyed working it out though, that was a lot of ...

I love this! I can't really find anything wrong in it. You've brought the characters to life brilliantly. I love how each character is outwardly stereotypical, but you've given them ...

I quite like this. It's interesting to see the point of view of the bad guy. I like the way you've made him confess about feeling guilty, even though he's ...

I don't fully understand why you've split the lines the way you have, but I like it. I have to agree the break between the first and second paragraph is ...

I love this poem. It's interesting the way you have described silence, as something that can actually get louder. 'Nature tries to nurture it's damaged children', this line is brilliant. ...

Hehe, I love how you've brought the three siblings to life, nicee work. You've got a lot of talent, especially considering your age. Two things I have to pick out. ...

Oh my word that was amazing! I love the way you've started with one main character and given everyone on the train their own personality and story, nicely done. This ...

One comment; 'a heady feeling as is – it’s the way the warm, flower-tinged air,' this sentence doesn't make much sense to me. I'm not really (or rather, really not) ...

I love this! You've done a great job setting up a backround and introducing the characters. I can't really see much wrong. There's a few cliche phrases in there, and ...

I really like this poem, there's too many people writing poems about teenage love, so compared to most this really stands out. Nice work. I think cutting it too short ...

This piece reminds me of a photo album, flicking between pictures and situations, that's quite smart. It's an interesting idea, personally I don't particularly like this format, but then that's ...

Lol. I don't think it was supposed to be as funny as I found it, but the first time reading it through I laughed. I will agree that although personally ...