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kogarasumaro143

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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Im "Just"

    @edgarallanpoe: jeee! thanks for the compliment.=)

    Jul 25, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Gathering at the Light

    *sigh* I don't like this poem. Even its good, the choice of right words is very important especially in poems where you relay more emotions to the readers comparing to ...

    Jul 25, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Like the Rainclouds

    Obvious! Next time let the reader follow the subject of you poem!

    Jul 25, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re:

    To kogarasumaro143,Changing the line you suggested does sound better, as I did aim to emphasise the fact that eyes are watching me. I think I may change it but I've ...

    Jul 25, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: what do i do with myself?

    Be more precise next time in using words to describe what you want to describe. Be formal in every writing because writing is a formal way of expressing ones though ...

    Jul 25, 2010


here is the deepest secret nobody knows (here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud and the sky of the sky of a tree called life; which grows higher than the soul can home or mind can hide) and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart i carry your heart (i carry it in my heart)
— e.e. cummings