kogarasumaro143

@edgarallanpoe: jeee! thanks for the compliment.=)

*sigh* I don't like this poem. Even its good, the choice of right words is very important especially in poems where you relay more emotions to the readers comparing to ...

Obvious! Next time let the reader follow the subject of you poem!

To kogarasumaro143,Changing the line you suggested does sound better, as I did aim to emphasise the fact that eyes are watching me. I think I may change it but I've ...

Be more precise next time in using words to describe what you want to describe. Be formal in every writing because writing is a formal way of expressing ones though ...