jpen510

Hey hey! I get to be the first one to comment! Hopefully I can give some good suggestions. First, in the way of a general impression, I really liked the ...

Hey there! Okay so I agree with the others on most of the the things they said. I like the fact that there is a bit of mystery to the ...

I am a huge fan of abstract stuff, the subtleties and such. Loved the fact that all of this was dialougue! Pete is very realistic and I've found that creating ...

Oh, how this gets me excited for this month :) I've never done WriMo before but I have a feeling that it's going to be kind of how you described ...

I don't have much to add to the previous comments, except that I can't wait to hear the rest of it! Beautiful imagery and language, it really made me step ...

Hi! First off, just wanted to say GREAT JOB! I was impressed with the maturity of the story, the flow of the plot, and the depth I found. Extremely well ...

Hey there! This story shows quite a bit of promise. It works really well as a flash fiction and I think you should keep it as such. But details still ...

Hi Borntoshop! First off let me say that I really like the plot of the story. Going from person to person in the house and examining the time frame from ...

Okay so I want to read the rest of it! It's a really interesting story line and this is a great first page that gets the reader interested and wanting ...

Well I don't know too much about poetry, but I really liked this! It was beautifully written! I breath in the air and it is sweet With the history Of ...

I really enjoyed this, I mean who hasn't daydreamed in school or at work about being somewhere else, being someone different and important? You have some really good descriptions and ...

I really felt the disappointment at the end as his guitar is stolen and he realizes he can never escape his station of life. You did really well with drawing ...