joshuapaul

Thanks for your replys. Hero, theres a few themes I'm really tryin to push her, one being ' Any religious faith can unite people.' Tom overcomes his racist and stubborn ...

Yea I'm familiar with American Pyscho. Well that makes perfect sense, I assumed she was dellusional but the way it was narrated confused me. I assumed the narrator was a ...

Chapter three much the same as two. The beard is explained with some subtlety which was lacking in chap. 2. The story is reeled in a little here which isn't ...

Very interesting piece. Quite a frantic style but well suited to the plot. Character is convincing and round. A very unique idea, usually considered taboo but you handled it very ...

fantastic feed back. The problems with the tense are common in everything I write. Alot of words and expressions are used only in New Zealand and perhaps don't make sense ...

No that's fine I asked for a brutal critique. The story is aimed at early teens so there is little else that can be said here all I want the ...