joshuapaul

Thanks for the helpful reviews. Edited once. I still alot of punctuation and things I am unsure about, I need a nitpick...

Thanks alot for your kind words Jennafina and Loveless

WD thank you! you are amazing... will PM if I have any concerns and just to clrify the Hero is a caricature, he is of little consequence or significance to ...

by saying it was 'written on the spot' you made it appear spontaneous and un proof-read, my 'line by line' analysis dealt with alot of nit picks most of which ...

well, considering it was 'written on the spot' I assumed it was not proof read and my original review had no such accusations. My response to your response may have ...

True, writers enjoy writing. They enjoy seeing their name on the cover of a classic. They enjoy meeting their characters for the first time, they enjoy writing the first draft, ...

Well if it was written on the spot why not write it using the formating on the website rather than M.O word or whatever programme you used? Furthermore, to get ...

Thanks everyone for the helpful feedback. This is a complete story so there will be no follow on pieces. Just thought I would post an alternative final paragraph. I prefer ...

Love it. I'm a guy so I shouldn't love it but I did. Refreshing and poetic. Great writing.

The title is deceptive and perhaps I should cange it. This is the complete story the end is ironic because he uses the same words (and so it goes) to ...

'Give the reader a reason to keep reading' - that is constructive. I apologise if I was harsh; I didn't enjoy the piece. I'm not doing the author a diservice ...

Perhaps mention this as a foreword. I still don't know what the reader could possibly take from this. Empress could you open my eyes a little, for you are the ...

leave it, the ambiguity is good leaves thereader thinking.

Thanks June, will impliment changes soon!

Thanks June will PM regarding punctuation!