joshuapaul

I like you confetti. And, like a friend, I think I can be completely honest with you. With that in mind I will do away with the sugar coating, I ...

Contest entry: 150 Words FOR SALE! Rare Indian Krait; cheap. That is what it said at the top of the page. This for the most part is very concise, you ...

Wow, this isn't bad. I'm not going to critique this with any depth - I simply don't have the time. The writing itself needs a lot of work. I was, ...

I don't know why I read this. It was all a little silly for my taste, but the fact I read it through without stopping for errors, means it was ...

Laura seems to have been pretty thorough so I won't nit pick. I will say this though - by the time I finished the first sentence I was done with ...

Hi there, I wanted to be comprehensive and really weed out the little distractions that blight this piece but it's bed time in Vancouver, and I stumbled upon this by ...

Wow. This is amazing, I think I prefer the first one of the two. With such a demanding word limit even the title has to be carefully considered, and designed ...

I will assume this is for my contest so I will be reviewing the final product later on. I must ask, what theme did you select? It could be one ...

Hi there, OK a couple of things to say here. Seeing them, Danny, Chrissy, Michael, Jean-Paul, Sahara, Misty, Anna Maria, John-Luc, Justice, Liberty, and all the others looking at me ...

Hi there, I was going to critique this. Then I realised I reviewed the first chapter for you, and it seems all my suggestions fell upon deaf ears. I read ...

Wow this sounds great. Very deep stuff, which is quite rare for young writers. Despite how much I love this premise I think it will take a great deal of ...

Hello Confetti, Here I am, as promised. Let's go. I think my first memory of you is when we were six. This is good, but a little confusing, are we ...

Ha -- brilliant! Is this for Snoinks competition? In any case this is great. That’s just our way and it works fine for all the swine so I’m proud to ...

Hmm, I really wanted to critique this Twit, but it appears you have a fleet of reviewers who have probably covered anything I would suggest. So I might just address ...

Artemis covered it for the most part but here is my take. [ The city was loud enough before the war. Great opener. Eloquently sets the scene. On its own, ...