jefferyffe

I like this piece. However, I want more of a background with her parents, perhaps add a scene where they argue with each other over her choice. Maybe you could ...

I don't like that it's a dream. I want to see your narrator fight against something she can't control, in the real world. I want to be able to root ...

This is a very traumatic story and I appreciate your willingness to write and share it. My critiques are the exact same as everyone else's. I guess in a revision ...

I absolutely loved the build up of tension when she's looking at the painting. I could feel the tension which is wonderful, of course. I also found myself rooting for ...

I enjoyed this, I found it was a very compelling character sketch. I would like to see more of an Oedipal complex along with some kind of guilt for what ...