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Listen man, don't listen to what she said (her above me.) Sometimes, like with this poem, you're writing for your own benifit, and not really for others to relate to. ...

I think you need to change a few things. "Waiting...waiting...fo...for...the words come," should probably be changed to, Waiting...waiting...for...for...the words come," "clicking¾now" I believe you

I enjoyed this as well. But I personally think the stanzas need to be broken apat. Making a total of four stanzas. The first one could be broken up after ...

This is crazy good! I've been feeling just like that for a while now. This pretty much sums up alot of things about life. I think it's so annoying how ...

You really need to use proper puncuation marks. Look through the poem and find where you ask questions and put, you guessed it, question marks! Other than that I enjoyed ...

Trident, I think you should add to this. Simply write more stanzas. This left me on a cliff, it ended abruptly with no real ending. The tone is good and ...

You need to break u[ your lines, they're to long. A new line should start at the end of every period. Also at most commas. Put them where you would ...

HOLY Quacimoli!!! This is way to fast for a reader to understand. Who is Wildwood? Where is Firecrow's village? Is it in the montains or the desert? What does Firecrow ...

I think the lines need to be broken up. Why? Because when you have to take a breath in the middle of a line it causes you to either forget ...

I liked it alot. I think you should break up some of the longer lines. Quote "in magazines now, partnered to happily-ever-after cautionary tales" Should be split after the comma. ...